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This year I have become really interested in the japanese forms of Tanka and Haiku. It is not easy for me. For every ten I write about three get published. So it is very difficult, at least for me. I am getting better, but progress is slow and there are few forums that are exclusively for these forms. These are my last six tanka.

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at the funeral parlor,
the still-life painting
echoes of winter sleet --
honey bees and rue
in her pocket


fragrant cedar
archer aims a flaming arrow
beneath my corpse
catamaran: the beginning
of the journey



old bridge
like the new one
a signature structure
not merely a memory
on the back of the sun


rainy day
the wind is still chilly
swallows trill
I recognize their voices
by the years gone by


a restless wind
strip searches
the beach
I’m one step closer
to a ban on naughty


great apes
branch to branch free range
the missing link
swinging arm over arm
at the disco

I missed this little group. Very enjoyable, particularly the fifth one.

Thank you bluejay, I am improving. You should have seen my attempts six months ago. LOL.

Sergio