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Postby TroutParadigm on Tue May 19, 2009 2:05 pm

semi-lotus sit
under
bare branched shadow's drips
preying on sensor slits

tongue slickered lips
dreedle
sap cones slicky grip
semi praying lotus sit
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Postby jeRRy.whaLLey on Wed May 20, 2009 10:01 pm

[quote="TroutParadigm"]semi-lotus sit
under
bare branched shadow's drips
preying on sensor slits

tongue slickered lips
dreedle
sap cones slicky grip
semi praying lotus sit[/quote]

you're word-play is satori-iffic with sounds making the piece release itself into vibration -- sing-ing all the way OM
keep playing this way and you'll find your rhythm -- breaking words and then making them tremble to disturb meaning
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Postby TroutParadigm on Thu May 21, 2009 12:36 pm

Thanks Jerry. I suppose this could be my own twisted version of a villanelle.

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