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what the fuck did camus know.

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Postby varun on Mon Feb 04, 2008 1:15 pm

said his heart was missing
beats. just randomly, but never went
to see someone about it.
sunken eyes full of cigarettes
and alcohol made sure
he could not see clear or run
as fast as he wished.
he fell in love. many times.
many times, he died.
sometimes insomnia struck him
in the middle of his forehead.
other times he woke up
in a sweat, thirsty. one day
he started laughing.
and never stopped.
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Postby visitor on Mon Feb 04, 2008 7:08 pm

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I admire every detail of this poem. The line breaks are clever. It begins mid-flight.... as though in the middle of a compelling paragraph. The punctuation is perfect. Best of all, perhaps, is that wry desperation-- hopelessness with a sense of humour.

One of my favourites-- instant classic.
Thank you for posting this.

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Postby bluejay on Mon Feb 04, 2008 8:31 pm

Don't think I could knock this if I wanted.

this is a great section:


sunken eyes full of cigarettes
and alcohol made sure
he could not see clear or run
as fast as he wished.
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Postby jeRRy.whaLLey on Mon Feb 04, 2008 10:18 pm

A Poetic biography encapsulating observation with a wry wit in it -- things I did not know about Al and now completely makes sense!
-- we do not live on the Earth we ARE the Earth --
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Postby jeRRy.whaLLey on Mon Feb 04, 2008 10:20 pm

A Poetic biography encapsulating observation with a wry wit in it -- things I did not know about Al and now completely makes sense!
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Postby varun on Tue Feb 05, 2008 6:00 pm

wow, didn't expect this to have such a welcome.

thank you for commenting folks.
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