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infinite night

... so they became
lights in the firmament,
stars in the night!

from darkness comes light
and of the deeper,
allured to those dreams

a loneliness is cast
toward the edge of forever
in longing swells.

there is nothing left to burn
when infernal anguishes sputter;
the stars are falling!

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in infinite darkness
an ancient ache cried out
in a million quivering lights
as if the night wept stars --

Infernal (anguihes) sputter - the sounds here clashed for me. I wonder if it could be "anguish sputters. Just a thought for you to consider.

Sergio