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His painted testimony

I followed his brush strokes
Across the canvases of time.
Many eyes have rested upon his work
Within each brush stroke lives his gift,
His testimony for mankind.

Hello Abieine

Maybe a bit too general? "Across the canvases of time" and "testimony for mankind" might be too amorphous. How about if you wrote about a particular artist and wrote what you felt? You say that many eyes have seen the artist's work and each brush stroke is a gift. However, that's really too universal. Give us specifics not generalities.... something for us to sink our teeth into. Good writing should be memorable not tell us what we already know. Good luck, Abilene.

Chris

Not that you should have to name a particular artist (I could deal with this as a metaphor) but I don't find any personality in the description. Short poems can carry a lot of meaning, but only when each word carries its own weight. Here, for verbs we find, followed, rested, and lives--yawners, all. And every noun is predictable. I'm left having to take your word for it, and I'm not convinced.