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here I lay

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here I lay

by lavicrat on Mon Jul 13, 2009 5:39 pm

Here I lay and here I lie
Praising, gazing at the sky
A sight so bright to the naked eye
and I can only wonder why

The earth goes spinning slowly by
Howling, growling through the sky
The light just might be a lovely lie
a shadow play to make me cry

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by bluejay on Tue Jul 14, 2009 4:39 am

lavicrat,

Thanks for jumping in and posting. Always nice to have fresh words in the air. Please read and post at will, if you have questions send me a message.

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by Slagcake<3 on Wed Jul 15, 2009 1:27 am

lavicrat,

I absolutely love this. I'm normally not a huge fan of poems that rhyme like this, but this one is great. I love the concept of it. The only other thing I really have to say is keep it up, your work here is great :]

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by jain on Wed Jul 15, 2009 6:26 am

lavicrat,

i loved your poem with the rhyme.
jain.

Life, a page of overlapped signatures!!

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