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bit-n-pieces, by jain, moved by bluejay

Post for light, positive commentary: unfinished or unserious poems, poetry by others, by beginners, etc.

bit-n-pieces, by jain, moved by bluejay

Postby bluejay on Sat May 09, 2009 3:36 pm

I moved this from another section of the forum, but it was lost in the process. Thankfully, I copied before moving. It is the first post by member jain. Sorry for the screw-up.






and I realize words r the language of ur heart; always it tries to depict in vain what exactly ur emotion is… but wins over the situation to an extend I do agree, but fails miserably for the exact word very often n of course this’s meant only for the people thinking with their heart and definitely not their brain….

I lost myself somewhere on the hustle of this buzy life which seemed lasting… but do I know it’s a dream I dreamt with an open eyes in the evening … dream in a dream never ever has a moment’s existence I realized of late… n I smile a serene smile of knowing the knowable yet unknown n unaware in the hazy day of wakeful dreaming…

I was a happy person with my aloneness … very happy n content with my own self..music on I go on n on.. where r those beautiful days?!! Where did I miss them??!! What for??!! Don’t know, yet know perfectly well as to where it has gone… I will bring it back… I need my space n I need my happiness/peacefulness with music n writings… that’s what I am… I can never be in a frame , closed frame of so n so n so n so n so n so…. Yesssz incomplete is this life without my aloneness... a silent existence with my duties performed perfectly well [a self pat when none else do that on u) and a compassionate self in my own uninterrupted aloneness- a wish ... :cool:
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Postby Windy on Sun May 17, 2009 3:42 pm

This has a distinct 'stream of consciousness' feel to it. The stops and starts of thought, one to the next, connected threads.

I think most creative people can relate to a lot of what you've said here.

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Postby jain on Mon Jun 08, 2009 7:13 am

Diane,
am sorry i didn't see your reply to my 'bits and pieces'... something had happened to that 'bits' with my posting...and since am new to this site, i was only getting familiar with...
just now, i happened to see this and here am coming to yu with all my happy feeling that you were accurate to what i tried to make sense through this piece... thank you.
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